I thought I would post one of my poems in hopes of some constructive feedback.
I am considering compiling a book of poems delving into Tai Chi theories and would be interested in any comments anyone might like to make...It would be very helpful.
Thank you,
Pamela R. Santini
Staking and Song
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"Staking" a claim on natures firm ground,
"Sinking" and "Rooting", "Song" and profound.
Silence encompasses, thoughts hurry yonder,
The brow is reborn, abundance to ponder.
Inhaling deeply, let it all go,
Gathering inward, sensing the "Flow".
"Seating" the waist and bend in the knees,
Release and relax with delicate ease.
Feet "Clawing" the earth, legs "Yang" and "Yin",
Smooth alternation balanced therein.
"Raise" up the back, "Straightness" display,
"Sunken" the chest, "Curved" hollow inlay.
"Empty" the neck, "Tuck~in" the chin,
Rich permeation, storing the "Jin".
"Crown" of the head suspend from above,
"Qi" flowing upward spins "Reeling" glove.
Tongue presses palette, makes the connection,
"Micro~Cosmic Orbit", cycles utter perfection.
Eyes clearly focused, alert and intense,
Thoughts of a feline, his prey his defense.
Shoulders "Relaxed", loosened and down,
Arm sinews opened, so elbows can round.
Circular, spherical, arms pose embrace,
Wrists ever~changing, angling grace.
Allowing the hands, slightly concave,
Returning expressions of energies gave.
"Quiessence" existing, stillness in motion,
Breath changing pattern, "Empty", "Full" notion.
Intention of spirit residing within,
True cultivation, refinement of "Shen".